Austin Jackson
(Motivational Essayist)
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Dan Neumann (Editor): Let me introduce you all to Austin Jackson, an eight grader from the Texan school, Crenshaw, of the Galveston Independent School District. His literary talents have been overlooked in a recent competition. Please do not let Austin be overlooked again. He has plenty of potential, which more than certainly justifies the read.
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Communication Defeats Ignorance
Loss, pain, hate, time: those so-called gifts were
forced upon me. Ten, an age of careless fun and chosen obliviousness, was torn
from my hopeless hands. Misery, and suffering is the only gifts you’ll receive
when exchanging violence. Divorce is the cursed gift I obtained, even though I
committed no crime, wrong, or violent deed. Summer once was a time for friends
and family; now it only brings back memories of how my friends were left behind.
And, as for my family: violently ripped into two pathetic clans, diminishing
from a large healthy, caring family to silently warring, barbarian troops.
Assault rings in my crying ears as the school bells alert me to what time of the
year it is, the wretched, unthinkable awareness. This is the age I realized the
hell many people are dragged through.
With an uncontrolled mind, induced by consuming too
much alcohol, anyone can take a simple gesture to be a horrible insult, worthy
of fighting over. This is one of the causes which led to my parents’ divorce.
Drinking excess amounts of alcohol can lead a person to be very irritable,
unreasonable, and irresponsible.
For some reason, people have a drink and tend to
believe that they are invincible, bullet proof, and untouchable.
A “shot” here, a “shot” there and all of a sudden
parents, brothers, sisters, aunts, uncles, and cousins become rabid wolves,
trying to determine who is really the alpha.
No longer do they communicate, compromise, or
discuss anything, but force to overcome their disagreements.
Alcohol becomes their mediation.
The more they drink, the more irresistible it
becomes creating a false of sense of superiority.
Alcohol simply creates a new person with a new
sinister attitude.
Not all alcoholics become violent. It appears,
however, that more abuse and deaths are reported in the news that has involved
alcohol than non-alcoholic related injuries or fatalities.
Still, not all violence can be contributed to
anger, alcohol and drugs.
Difference has erupted into violence over and over
again.
Instead of acceptance and equality, violence tends to win
the battle over peace.
For example, in the 1940’s, the world found itself
encountering the volatile menacing force of Hitler.
Accepting people’s differences was not a choice for
Hitler and Nazi followers.
Their resolution: the extinction of all those that
were different.
Not by exile or removal… Hitler and the Nazis
practiced genocide, attempting to violently wipe out entire races, religions,
and anyone with a disability.
They believed that they were superior, and the only
way to deal with any difference was to wipe it out.
Even our own country has committed violent, racist,
and horrible acts against cultures and people they didn’t understand. As early
as the settling of
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Comments:
Dan Neumann (Editor): As I have said in your introduction, you have much potential as a writer—with certainly enough talent right now to place your writing higher than your peers. I hated writing around your age, so you should proud of what you have accomplished so far. With that said, there are a few things you need to work on: basic sentence structure, an active voice, and aptly placed metaphors. I suggest you look over the revisions I made to your work, comparing it with the draft sent to me. I enjoyed your essay, and appreciated the power of your message. Bringing in an emotional slant to your paper (your parents' divorce) benefited your argument substantially. Don't be shy to submit again. Oh, by the way, I gave your paper a title. I hope you like it.
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